Right.. here is goes. Remember not critisism... just opinions on what could be done to improve it. felt like some important shots where brushed over....
0:26 He's fired, the fired bit needs to be a bit more prominent... i.e. longer while the long letter felt like it was trying to tell me something, but wasn't sure
0:46 Clip with phone is too short. Would have worked better if it jumped to a clip with Chris holding the phone and hanging up rather than the image. (if you want, use a cheap pay as you go phone too lol, they are donned the drug dealer phone).
0:42 The clear part of the Casino sign footage needs to last a split second longer.,
0:50 opened letters looked like a good idea, but didn't even notice them the first time round. Maybe make the bills more dominant during the scene where Tash is holding a load of bills... i.e. have it on the other hand for longer directed at Chris's face.
1:15 I liked the falling on the bed, but wasn't sure about the scene mixing with the sitting down. It felt quite powerful so had me thinking for a while, wondering if it would sit better somewhere else maybe after all the sitting or not at all. hmmm have a think, it puzzles me still. But both of them with their backs against the wall... nice.
1:50 with Chris gambling against his evil darker side (I think that was brilliant btw, even if it wasn't intended), I kept waiting for him to go nuts and throw/break the table or throw the chips or something with anger... it would help jell the scene to the bathroom guilt scene a little better.
The 30 second gap where the band was singing made me lose interest in the gambling story, so when the bathroom mirror came up, I was trying to work out what was happening. Maybe this is the perfect place for a breaking/throwing table/gambling chips or something scene.... just before the mirror but after the band.
2:18 take away the scene with Chris in a dark top in front of the mirror, unless that's supposed to mean something that I didn't get? it dis-conjoins it and had me really confused as to what you where trying to say.
2:41 It's a shame that Chris has found enlightenment, and only has a few split seconds to show it off, make the scene with him facing the alter a little longer and give him some justice.
2:48 Lake was a bit random? not convinced yet... the film is all dark, then all of a sudden a bright sunny day at the lakes.. I'd have shot in the shot when it was slightly darker with a light or use filters to create the effect that its dark... Also I'd love to see the camera zoom into his arm as he throws it, give the scene some drama.
2:59 finally I think you need to shave at least 1/1.5 seconds off the start of the card flicking scene, waiting that whole second wondering what's going on felt like a lifetime.
Oh and of course the still images at the beginning lol.
